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'what are you scared of?'


she was too pale to be held against the sun: so she leans against it until you can't see her face.

her eyes were chalk-smudges on blackboards, blurred against a backdrop of white-washed walls. her outline was all fade-out and lace, as white as winter could be.

her words were quiet like stains are, clinging to a curtain in the window. just trying to blend into the pattern, or at least not become part of it.

and when she breathes her chest swells with see-through lungs--hoping that if you focus, you'll see right through her glass skin. after all, she's just a smudge of the wrong varnish in your eyes.

she shudders, and tastes all that's hollow drip down her wrist. and today, it looks grey instead of saccharine. regret honey-fills the cracks in her over-dried lips and ice-splintered skin. inklings of every word she forgot how to say. since, of course, they never made it past dead-deaf ears anyways.

knowing you'll never notice she's crying. crying for everything she'll tell others to do without crying.

she keeps her eyes open and watches the color she envies paint every cell. bleeding to the edge of a picture. but, she knows there are faces behind those walls, and they're just waiting to watch her fall. paraphrasing every scream.

because when she leans against them, she finds she's a to-be has-been, a half-damaged knock-off. defected and under-priced goods. and when she's away, she's colorblind.


'the knife against my throat.'
Cold metal against my tongue. Unable. Hollow. Invisible.

Demons.

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For a contest. Hope I win. :D
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:iconlurkerofchalice1987:
LurkerOfChalice1987 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i never understood cutting for attention, but suicide i understand very well...

great poem
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SelfHarmsAngel Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This helps put to words how I feel tonight.
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natalieluvsunicorns Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Would you mind if I set this to music?
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natalieluvsunicorns Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Wow...that was incredible. It was amazing. The symbolism and metaphors were incredible. I cut, and it really hits close to home. It describes my emotions perfectly. Thank you for that.
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shadowkirby97 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Beautiful. Loved every bit of it. Really does describe the mindset of a cutter.
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Major-Session Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
On the outside we smile.
On the inside we scream, the pain a dark ichor in our vains.
The we bleed out the hurt and become... Hollow.
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MadHat11D6 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   Writer
Your piece has been featured here and here. A critique will be coming to you soon!
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winterkate Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
Wow. This is amazing. I love the colorblind line, and how universal you make her feel. What contest?
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was nothing. And I lost anyways. XD

Thanks for the lovely comment~!
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winterkate Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student Writer
Haha, you should've won. Looks like *dons sunglasses* those judges were regular-blind.

Anyone? Anyone?
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lupalover101 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is a great piece of work. I love your imagery and how you make the reader feel like they can relate to the story, seeing as many of us can pass through a moment like this at some point. The words used are marvelous, a perfect example of how words can make more of an impact than an actual image.

An overall extraordinary piece of work that is an immediate favorite and a great eye opener, i hope to see more in the future!

~Lupa
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
O: Wow! Thank you for the lovely and detailed comment. Your praise just makes my heart swell. ^^ Thank you once more.
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lupalover101 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
your very welcome my dear! i believe stories that come from the heart deserve a great comment and praise!
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:la: Ah, that's so kind--again. XD
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love how simple your words are, but they're still so magical.
I love "her words were quiet like stains are, clinging to a curtain in the window".
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^ Thanks! That's actually a near-quote from the song "The Man With A Thousand Faces" by Regina Specktor. :3
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! I'm ashamed to have not heard that song, I love Regina Spektor :meow: Will definitely give it a listen.
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^ It's one of my favorites! I would highly recommend it. ;)
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I had it on my computer and didn't know ha. It's beautiful :nod:
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
XD Well, glad you like it.
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Hrodwulf-Gottshalk Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Student General Artist
I really like this.

It's beautiful. ;u; <3
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! ^^ Glad you think so.
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Android3000 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist
Well done
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. ^^
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AlterEgo1629 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
In my honest opinion, I thought it should have started from "what are you scared of". I felt like the intro didn't do much for the piece, and almost turned me off from continuing because it was old and clichéd. After that part though, the piece shined. It was wonderfully bursting with imagery, and the voice of the piece is very mellow. I really liked it.
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
o,o' I know it's old and cliche. But, in the part this is a remix of an older piece, I felt as thought I should keep it.
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AlterEgo1629 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, that makes sense then. I didn't realize, so that's why it felt very out of place. :)
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theComicKid Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting. Pretty good.
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. ^^
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Be-Back-Soon Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful.
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awh, thank you! :D That means so much. ^^
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Be-Back-Soon Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.
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Dah-Art-Yamazaru Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is...so amazing...
I love your writing style.
It gave me chills and dug up some painful memories...
Well written, keep up the good work.
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Dawh~! Thank you so much, my friend. It's comments like these that brighten my day.
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Dah-Art-Yamazaru Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aww well I'm glad I brightened your day :D
PS thanks for the llama sticker! >w<
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Take good care of that llama. :salute:
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Dah-Art-Yamazaru Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha I shall :D and you take care of the one I just sent you ^^
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
-pets llama- I shall, my friend. I shall. -Looks into the sunset...eyes catch on fire-
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Dah-Art-Yamazaru Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
D: *shoves sunglasses on your eyes*
B)
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for that...-pours water on eyeballs-
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theartsydoglover Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Absolutely beautiful. You have a talent. Brilliant work. :clap:
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I wouldn't say talent...but...THANKS! :dummy:
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Spagettimoon Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This hurt... well written.
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. That's very lovely to hear, although I wish that you couldn't relate...
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Spagettimoon Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks x) but that was the past
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, good. ^^
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MariekeSmit Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Finally I know what it must feel like to be all shattered up in pieces.
beautiful work, though very sad.
(by the way respect for your reactions on almost every comment)
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
(I always respond to every comment. ;-; On my old account I responded to 2'000+ comments on one work.)
I was really going for that kind of shattered vacancy...nice to hear that I caught it. ;)
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MariekeSmit Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
(that's awesome)
you did, and it was beautiful
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poetic-headache Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awh, well thank you again. :3
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