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'what are you scared of?'


she was too pale to be held against the sun: so she leans against it until you can't see her face.

her eyes were chalk-smudges on blackboards, blurred against a backdrop of white-washed walls. her outline was all fade-out and lace, as white as winter could be.

her words were quiet like stains are, clinging to a curtain in the window. just trying to blend into the pattern, or at least not become part of it.

and when she breathes her chest swells with see-through lungs--hoping that if you focus, you'll see right through her glass skin. after all, she's just a smudge of the wrong varnish in your eyes.

she shudders, and tastes all that's hollow drip down her wrist. and today, it looks grey instead of saccharine. regret honey-fills the cracks in her over-dried lips and ice-splintered skin. inklings of every word she forgot how to say. since, of course, they never made it past dead-deaf ears anyways.

knowing you'll never notice she's crying. crying for everything she'll tell others to do without crying.

she keeps her eyes open and watches the color she envies paint every cell. bleeding to the edge of a picture. but, she knows there are faces behind those walls, and they're just waiting to watch her fall. paraphrasing every scream.

because when she leans against them, she finds she's a to-be has-been, a half-damaged knock-off. defected and under-priced goods. and when she's away, she's colorblind.


'the knife against my throat.'
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Cold metal against my tongue. Unable. Hollow. Invisible.

Demons.

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For a contest. Hope I win. :D
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:iconnatalieluvsunicorns:
Would you mind if I set this to music?
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:iconnatalieluvsunicorns:
Wow...that was incredible. It was amazing. The symbolism and metaphors were incredible. I cut, and it really hits close to home. It describes my emotions perfectly. Thank you for that.
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:iconshadowkirby97:
Beautiful. Loved every bit of it. Really does describe the mindset of a cutter.
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On the outside we smile.
On the inside we scream, the pain a dark ichor in our vains.
The we bleed out the hurt and become... Hollow.
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~MadHat11D6 Nov 6, 2012   Writer
Your piece has been featured here and here. A critique will be coming to you soon!
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~winterkate Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
Wow. This is amazing. I love the colorblind line, and how universal you make her feel. What contest?
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~poetic-headache Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was nothing. And I lost anyways. XD

Thanks for the lovely comment~!
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~winterkate Oct 27, 2012  Student Writer
Haha, you should've won. Looks like *dons sunglasses* those judges were regular-blind.

Anyone? Anyone?
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~lupalover101 Oct 11, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is a great piece of work. I love your imagery and how you make the reader feel like they can relate to the story, seeing as many of us can pass through a moment like this at some point. The words used are marvelous, a perfect example of how words can make more of an impact than an actual image.

An overall extraordinary piece of work that is an immediate favorite and a great eye opener, i hope to see more in the future!

~Lupa
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~poetic-headache Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
O: Wow! Thank you for the lovely and detailed comment. Your praise just makes my heart swell. ^^ Thank you once more.
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